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Escape from New York, by Ken Nolan - June 16, 2007 draft
This was a pretty good read, with some great action and expands on some scenes from the original in interesting ways, like the extra stuff with the crazies and the Madison Square Garden fight. The third is act is completely goddamn insane, too. I do think it hits maybe a few too many of the same beats as the original, though, and Snake's flashbacks are very awkwardly inserted into the script as a whole, and don't really add up to a whole lot, either.
 
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Escape from New York, by Ken Nolan - June 16, 2007 draft
This was a pretty good read, with some great action and expands on some scenes from the original in interesting ways, like the extra stuff with the crazies and the Madison Square Garden fight. The third is act is completely goddamn insane, too. I do think it hits maybe a few too many of the same beats as the original, though, and Snake's flashbacks are very awkwardly inserted into the script as a whole, and don't really add up to a whole lot, either.
To me, I thought it was brilliant but it was so goddamn insane at the same time.
 
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I shared my thoughts about this script and 2010 re-write by Allan Loeb before on this thread, but i must say that i agree not just that it is a damn good script with lot of great moments, but that Snake's flashbacks are really unnecessary, not just because of the reasons you mentioned but also because i think he is much better as just being a badass character with mysterious past which we never get to find out. Wouldn't surprise me if Nolan cut all that out in later drafts.
 
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Escape from New York, by Ken Nolan - Revisions by David Kajganich - Current Revisions by Allan Loeb
This was a pretty decent read, and subverted enough scenes from the original to keep me guessing. Some of the action scenes were very good, too, like the Crazies in the flooded tunnels, the Chrysler Building scene, and the insane car chase. And I like the idea of Snake having been a prisoner for years, and becoming a legend among the population. That being said, I do think he's a bit too nice here, and Brain wasn't used as well as he could have been. And Loeb must have first found out about transsexuals the week before he wrote this, because there's a running gag about them that's more weird and random than anything. And the character of Gina sooooo wouldn't fly today. XD

I do wonder what Kajganich's contributions were. Ken Nolan's script really only influenced one or two very small elements of this draft, so Kajganich could have written hardly any of it.
 
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And I like the idea of Snake having been a prisoner for years, and becoming a legend among the population. That being said, I do think he's a bit too nice here
Exactly, that was my only problem with his character in this script. He is more of a typical hero than anti-hero he is supposed to be. I do like this draft as well but Nolan's script was still much better and definitely lot more insane when it come to action moments. I think if some of the best moments from Loeb's draft were put in Nolan's then it really could have been perfect for new modern version of the film.

Finding out more about David Kajganich draft would have been interesting, but what i'd really like to know is was there one or more drafts after Loeb's, considering how Joel Silver said in 2014 how the script for the remake was inspired by Batman: Arkham City, but there were no reports about anyone writing a script in that year.

And yes, if the movie was made today based on Loeb's script, SJW's would tear it to shreds just because of Gina's character.
 
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Exactly, that was my only problem with his character in this script. He is more of a typical hero than anti-hero he is supposed to be. I do like this draft as well but Nolan's script was still much better and definitely lot more insane when it come to action moments. I think if some of the best moments from Loeb's draft were put in Nolan's then it really could have been perfect for new modern version of the film.

Finding out more about David Kajganich draft would have been interesting, but what i'd really like to know is was there one or more drafts after Loeb's, considering how Joel Silver said in 2014 how the script for the remake was inspired by Batman: Arkham City, but there were no reports about anyone writing a script in that year.

And yes, if the movie was made today based on Loeb's script, SJW's would tear it to shreds just because of Gina's character.
Yeah, if they put a variation of Snake's final duel with The Duke into the Nolan draft, that would have been awesome. And I wouldn't be wondering about that massive design flaw with the security cannons. XD
 
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Friday the 13th, by Chris Gehrt
Not bad for a unofficial spec script, but the characters aren't quite as good as the script thinks they are. And there's a lot of buildup with Gafner that just kind of fades out and goes nowhere.
 
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The Legend of Conan, by Will Beall - October 2014 draft
Some things about this are a little better than the 2015 draft. More time is spent with the villains, Wulfgar and Tenko feel like they have more to do, it's neat seeing Howard's Serpent Men make an appearance, and using an ancient Set temple instead of relocating the tower from the original movie to a different location makes a bit more sense. That being said, there's a weird side quest action scene involving a frozen lake and a kronosaurus, one of the twists has less impact than in the later draft, and that same continuity **** up is here, too. The 2015 version is overall tighter.
 
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Meg, by Tom Wheeler
This was okay-ish, and a closer adaptation of the novel than the actual film was. It's all just kind of bland, though.
 
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I may or may not have stumbled across Shane Black's Doc Savage and Halloween: Two Faces of Evil. They were on the Screenwriter's Network Drive. I didn't even know they were available.
Is this the right thread for this? Seems to me this thread has been for short reviews of unproduced films, not for just mentioning something you have.

But I could be wrong.

And both of those have been available for a while so it’s not a big get by that group by any means.
 
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Is this the right thread for this? Seems to me this thread has been for short reviews of unproduced films, not for just mentioning something you have.

But I could be wrong.

And both of those have been available for a while so it’s not a big get by that group by any means.
SN gets all their scripts from people promising to keep them private.
 
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Hulk, by John Turman - First Draft
This was pretty strong on the whole, taking elements from the early Stan Lee stuff to make for an exciting romp. There's plenty of good Hulk action, and the Leader is a decent bad guy, even if he loses a step or two near the end. The ending is a pretty ballsy move, too, with Banner apparently dying and becoming the Hulk permanently. That could really have lead to some interesting stuff in a sequel. It maybe could have used a little more space between the Hulk outs in a few places, though, as they happen within pages of each other in places. And not only is the Leader's real name being "Leder" kind of a dumb pun, but he gets taken out a bit too easily, and then is more or less forgotten in the last three pages.
 
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Hulk, by Jonathan Hensleigh
This isn't very good. It starts off decently enough for a 90s superhero script/movie, but by the time the Hulk is first shown and he's driving a ******* car, it completely loses me. It's not helped by the bad guys being really goofy. One of them turns into a giant hummingbird, for Christ's sake.
I remember John Turman telling me this:
“Oh, I thought Jonathan Hensligh's Hulk draft was dreadful.

P.S. - John also tells me about Kevin Smith’s Six Million Dollar Man:
“Kevin Smith's Six Million Dollar Man script was terrible. He doesnt become the Six Million Dollar man until page 80.”
 
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The Hulk, by Michael France - 2nd Draft
This very well written, with some good characterization and insane action scenes. I'm not overly fond of Betty not being Ross' daughter here, and I could really do without the fast food bit where Bruce Banner turns into Leo Getz for five pages, but other than that this is a good one.
 
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