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Pet Sematary, by Matt Greenberg
This was... bad. Between weird changes like Victor Pascow, Church acting like the big bad, and a ******* cop out ending, this fails pretty hard.
 
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Tears Of The Sun - by Ron Bass, revised by Chris Gerolmo, June 30, 1994

Very good action adventure thriller with what i thought were well written characters and story. Would have been interesting and different type of film for John Woo, since he was the one who was going to direct it based on this version of the script in 1994. I can see how this story could have worked as Die Hard 4, even though it wasn't this version that was going to be changed into the script for it, but i'm not so sure that it would work as a modern Tarzan film.
 
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The Mummy, by Alan Ormsby - Rewrite by John Sayles
Very solid update on the original movie's story. On a third read, some of the lesser humorous bits ("You don't want a man who's all wrapped up in himself") stuck out to me a bit more, though.
 
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Tears Of The Sun - by Ron Bass, revised by Chris Gerolmo, June 30, 1994

Very good action adventure thriller with what i thought were well written characters and story. Would have been interesting and different type of film for John Woo, since he was the one who was going to direct it based on this version of the script in 1994. I can see how this story could have worked as Die Hard 4, even though it wasn't this version that was going to be changed into the script for it, but i'm not so sure that it would work as a modern Tarzan film.
Did you get the script from an auction?
 
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Silo AKA Denizens of Filth, by S. Craig Zahler
Very effective horror script, but I could have done with seeing and learning more about the different things living in the silo. It's just sort of left at "because radiation." That being said, what we do see, especially The Twins, is pretty freaky.
 
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Did you get the script from an auction?
No i didn't, but looks like there is a copy of it that is or was available to buy on some site, and it's mentioned on the cover how it's "basis for Die Hard 4". Like EightiesPower said, it's a public script so anyone interested should be able to find it.
 
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Silo AKA Denizens of Filth, by S. Craig Zahler
Very effective horror script, but I could have done with seeing and learning more about the different things living in the silo. It's just sort of left at "because radiation." That being said, what we do see, especially The Twins, is pretty freaky.
I agree, i found it to be even better and creepier than Narrow Caves, and i liked it more than that one. Wasn't too sure about the ending, but it's still very creepy, just like the rest of the script.
 
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No i didn't, but looks like there is a copy of it that is or was available to buy on some site, and it's mentioned on the cover how it's "basis for Die Hard 4". Like EightiesPower said, it's a public script so anyone interested should be able to find it.
Any info on the 2nd draft Scriptcity.com has?
 
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Unfortunately, no. Also, that 14.8.2000 "Man of War" draft is not for the same project, it's actually for the 2003 film.
 
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The Mummy, George Romero draft
This is probably the strongest of the Mummy scripts, in terms of horror elements, with plenty of gruesome moments. The overall arc Imhotep is given here is quite good as well, and including Kharis as his "mummy muscle" is a great nod to the 40s Mummy films.

It's really too bad about the flaws, which are a huge extraction from an otherwise decent script. The relationship drama between Mike and Helen is badly written, the social commentary is poor and ill fitting, and the script is filled with obnoxious bit part characters, including a wide range of ethnic stereotypes. Romero tries his damndest to make you loathe nearly everybody Imhotep or Kharis kills, which is just plain mean spirited.
 
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The Big Stone Grid, by S. Craig Zahler

This was a great, suitably grim and violent crime thriller, with a central conceit that's pretty clever and interesting. My only real issue is that I would have liked more about the bad guys and why there were doing what they were doing. Other than that, this was a good one.
 
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The Mummy, Rewrite by Mick Garris - Third Draft

This is basically a tweaked version of Romero's draft. The basic thrust of the story is the same, as are most of the basic plot points. Almost everything it did well is still present, while the stuff it didn't was changed for the better. The multiple time jumps at the beginning are scaled back to just one, Mike's and Helen's relationship drama is much more tolerable, and the irritating side characters are mostly toned down, replaced, or cut entirely. It also doesn't build a who done it plot around the missing artifacts just to make the culprit some random guy who shows up a sum total of twice before Kharis kills him. Now, it is unfortunate that some of Kharis' gory carnage is scaled back, and his fight against the cops in the museum at the end is cut completely, but if it means not having to deal with Willie the disgusting pawn shop owner, then I'm good. XD
 
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Raw Knuckles, by S. Craig Zahler
This was a great prohibition era crime story, with an excellently crafted ensemble cast and some truly messed up and creepy villains. It also managed to have a pretty interesting take on the debate surrounding prohibition, not just a simple good vs bad conflict. And the final use of the title image is just so goddamn satisfying.
 
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The Mummy, by Lloyd Fonvielle - Story by Lloyd Fonvielle and Kevin Jarre

Not the worst thing ever, and it has some effective, brutal horror scenes, but the central love story is pretty bad and cringey. Also, there are a number of concepts that feel very tacked on, like Kharis eating corpses to gain power, the desert tribesmen who resurrect him and then do little else of note, etc., that don't really go anywhere.
 
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They Repair Us, by S. Craig Zahler
This starts as an intriguing thriller, but ends up in fascinating science fiction territory by the end. A lot of really interesting ideas are on display here, leaving you a fair bit to chew on.
 
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The Architects of Fear, by Charlie Haas
The premise was very interesting, but I felt the update from the Cold War to the 90s made the entire plan seem a bit much, given the lack of a potential nuclear war. Bowman came off like such a crazed fanatic that it seemed off for everybody to go along with his ideas and never question them. No one ever goes, "Hey, you know this sounds ******* crazy, right?"
 
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A Nightmare on Elm Street 6 by Rachael Talalay & Michael Almereyda
Probably one of the first scripts I ever read when I started collecting and I like it more than Freddy's Dead: The Final Nightmare. While not perfect I felt more invested in the characters and the humor felt just right without being as cartoonish as the actual movie. If anything the humor had a good dark bent to it like the corpse elevator and Freddy abusing an inflatable version of Karen's mother. I also like that the Dream Police get to have an Avengers-style fight with Freddy.
The only complaint I have is the ending at least in terms of being "final." While I don't think people would take Freddy getting "spanked to death" seriously, I'll never forget it and even though the ending doesn't tease the idea of Freddy still haunting the survivor it doesn't feel like this is where the series could've ended for Freddy. At the very least Freddy's Dead had him being pulled into the real world and getting blown up.
 
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Conflicts of the Last Progenitors, by S. Craig Zahler
This wasn't a bad read overall, and I was really into the first half where it set up the version of the future it takes place in, as well as the initial exploration of Option-1. However, for reasons I can't really articulate, once the Sculptors show up and the conflict that drives the remainder kicks in, I found myself less interested and not really sure what to make of things.

Freddy getting "spanked to death"
Coach Schneider finally gets payback.
 
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