Unproduced Scripts

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Super Mario Bros., by Tom S. Parker and Jim Jennewein
This was a very fun read. I'm not super (heh) familiar with the series aside from the basic imagery and character design, but this seemed to stay pretty close to most of that. It was also very funny at times, and slips some crap past the radar. My one major issue is that Mario is kind of a huge ******* for large stretches, and it's hard to root for him.
 
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The Texas Rangers, by John Milius - December 11, 1991 draft

I really enjoyed this for the most part. It's a thrilling, well put together with a solid set of central characters. It's a shame Savoy wouldn't go for Tommy Lee Jones as McNelly, that would have been awesome. I haven't seen the movie that did eventually get made, but I don't think I want to. Ashton Kutcher as Durham? Ehhhhhh...
 
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Abomination, by Bragi Schut

Very good horror script with creepy atmosphere and interesting monster. The story is pretty simple and i think that helps the script because it doesn't take long for main plot to start. I really liked Wilkins, and how he's not some fearless hero who goes to battle the monster on his own, but instead acts like any normal human would in the situation like the one he found himself in. He gets scared a lot, but still knows that he is the only chance the Inuits have. And while it is bit of a cliche, i still liked the entire redemption thing that was going on with him.

Btw, can anyone recommend similar unproduced scripts, where one man or woman, or just a few people have to fight against some monster(s) while they are in some deserted area like woods, jungle, mountains, desert etc...?

Example, i read Aaron Sala's Beast, which is about woman who spends several years surviving on some island while fighting against a monster who lives there, and that script was such a pleasant surprise that it made me want to check out some similar ones. I recommend it to anyone.
 
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Abomination, by Bragi Schut

Btw, can anyone recommend similar unproduced scripts, where one man or woman, or just a few people have to fight against some monster(s) while they are in some deserted area like woods, jungle, mountains, desert etc...?
Mike, Nice comments. I've read it, too. Bragi is a friend and also a member here who logs in on occasion--though lately he is beyond busy with the interest he's gotten from ESCAPE ROOM. And, no, I can't "out" him, unfortunately.

As far as the question you posed, my script, FOE, is pretty much just that. It's unproduced, it's a small, very unusual group, the enemy is not human, and the setting is also very unusual.

Ambrose
 
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Yeah i still remember that one, specially those creepy as all living **** aliens and their parasites.
 
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Crusade, by Walon Green - Revisions by Gary Goldman
This is a really excellent read, with great characters, memorable moments, and an unvarnished, intelligent take on the time period. The description does get a bit, uh, operatic at times, though. Emmich "roaring like rutting elephant", anyone? XD
 
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Crusade, by Walon Green - Revisions by Gary Goldman
This is a really excellent read, with great characters, memorable moments, and an unvarnished, intelligent take on the time period. The description does get a bit, uh, operatic at times, though. Emmich "roaring like rutting elephant", anyone? XD
One of the best unproduced scripts of all time in my opinion. And also one of the most violent scripts i ever read, with some pretty intense scenes.
 
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Dante's Inferno, by Jay Basu
Not a bad script per se, but compared to the game it's a bit too sanitized. Dante in particular is much less interesting, being too much of a straightforward good guy, and all of his bad qualities either downplayed or removed. And replacing a redemption story with stopping the bad guys from getting a magic trinket doesn't really do it for me.
 
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The Guide - Jonathan Lemkin, revised second draft, November 26, 1997

I didn't read original novel from which this is based on, but as a script, i thought it was pretty good chase/thriller story, and Jane was a very interesting character. While the script doesn't have any big action scenes, the ones it does have are very good and at moments quite brutal, specially the entire chase and hunt through the woods. It makes me think, just how different and probably much better was Lemkin's Lethal Weapon 4 script he was working on around the same time he wrote this. He was the first who wrote a version of the story dealing with Chinese immigrants that Warner Bros. wanted for film to have, before they replaced him with other writers.
 
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I didn't read it, but from what i heard about the script (Superman dies and then his essence goes into Lois who gives birth to new Superman)? Hell no :)

But i have to say, Lemkin did knew how to write something insane and make it fun. His $$$$$$ script for example is obviously written to be very over the top with its action sequences and some of the story. And that's why i was surprised to see how he kept everything in The Guide very serious and realistic and did a good job with it.
 
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PIRATES OF THE CARIBBEAN - DEAD MEN TELL NO TALES
by Terry Rossio

The script is an early draft that needs some work and the writer is aware of some risky convolutions.

There are a lot of good ideas, interesting concepts and inspiring set pieces (the huge waterfalls with the animals inside remain in the movie version) although the action as described lacks of the energy that the genre requires. A lot is still left to the imagination of the VFX or story-board artists I guess.

In this draft, the writer deals with the Poseidon trident in a very different, and more interesting, way. It involves the Queen of Spain in a proeminent role. Syrena is one of her servant and Philip (the priest of the previous movie and Syrena's love interest) is our main protagonist. I was not a fan of Philip originally but he has more to do here although they are both kind of bland for my tastes. In the final movie, Will's son replaces Philip and Carina is a mix between four characters in Rossio draft: A similar astronomist, another love interest, Syrena and a little girl.

The numerous parallel storylines hurt the pacing of the movie as they are more or less entertaining at some points. Barbossa falling in love with a prostitute is really funny and the banters between Jack Sparrow and a subversive, creepy, and witty 9yo girl are enjoyable. That little girl (that can fight with a sword too!) is an important secondary character that may annoy some people but not me. She was well written and super fun to watch. Also, the writer plays on this trope on purpose in a way that should have convinced Disney to go with it. Yet, each character's arc find its justification during a last act that contains a revelation that may not be everyone's taste.
 
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Danger Girl - Andy Hartnell, November 18, 1998

Too long and silly script with lot of cheesy moments, humor and jokes that don't always work but there were few good ones, and the third act is a mess, but considering how this was written by same guy who created the comic book series, i guess i can say that at least it stayed true to the source(?). Even though this is a first draft, it's painfully obvious that Hartnell is first time writer. That being said, and with all the problems and mistakes it has, i wasn't bored with the script and it was a fun read, but it definitely needed lot more work by some other writers.

That's why i would be curious to see what were Mark Swift and Damian Shannon's re-writes of this script like. When it comes to their work, i always thought that despite all the changes that were made on it, Freddy Vs Jason was still a fun film, and 2009 Friday The 13th was a remake which i liked lot better than original film and some of its sequels. And it was their Danger Girl script which got them the job of writing FVJ. Btw, here's their tweet about why this version was cancelled;


One thing's for sure though about Hartnell's version of Danger Girl. There's no way that something politically incorrect like this would be made today, and without lot of SJW's bitching and complaining about it. Makes me wonder how this new version that's currently in development will be like.
 
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I remember it said it felt too much like Batman Forever in terms of theme and character arc. Though the real reason is likely that the script doesn't yield much of a toy line like they wanted.
 
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Howl - Jonathan Lemkin

I thought that this one is going to be a fun, modern day western mixed with werewolf horror movie, and i wasn't wrong. I'm not sure would i consider it to be as good as classics of the genre, but it's for sure better than any werewolf movie i saw in the last few years. If you liked something similar like Scott Rosenberg's Bad Moon Rising for example which is another fun and very good unproduced werewolf horror script (and another one which includes werewolf biker gang), or if you liked Lemkin's $$$$$$ and thought it was a fun tongue in cheek script, i think you'll like Howl as well.
 
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